Talk:Black Canyon of the Gunnison National Park
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[edit] Improvements needed
This article is lacking much information about the park. I've added to the geology section, but there are several other areas that need either to be added or improved (IMHO):
- Climbing (routes, difficulty levels, interesting info)
- Driving tours
- Camping
- Hiking
- Intercanyon (going down to the river)
- Rim trails
- History
- Pre-Columbian
- First European contact
- National Monument status
- National Park status
- Wildlife
- more than just birds are needed, plus more on Peregrine Falcons would be good
- Plant life
- more than just a list of what can be found
I'm sure there are more topics that could be added. I'll be working on this article as I have time (though I don't have much now-a-days), but feel free to add to it! I don't feel the article currently gives a unknowledgable reader enough information about the park.
--Benwildeboer 19:23, 30 October 2006 (UTC)
[edit] GA review comments
Well, here they are:
Between values and units, use non-breaking spaces which look like"The more developed south rim entrance is located 15 miles (24 km) east of Montrose. The north rim entrance is located 11 miles (18 km) south of Crawford and is closed in the winter. " - make one sentence by adding "...while..." instead of the full stop."The park is 47 mi² (122 km²) in size. The entire canyon is approximately 48 miles long, 12 miles of which are located in the national park." - reads very choppy, can you re-organise to flow this better?Don't wikilink the 122 in the 122 square kilometres.Why only wikilink the odd unit, I'd be consistent and wikilink each of them for the first time you use them.Citations need to be positioned according to WP:CITE, in particular the first use of [1] needs the space to be removed, first uses of [3], [4] & [5] need that and the full stop removing after it."The entire area underwent uplift during the Laramide orogeny between 70 and 40 million years ago. The Gunnison Uplift is an example of this event. This raised the Precambrian gneisses and schists that make up the canyon walls." - three short sentences, can you flow them together to improve the prose?Ref [6], [8], [9], [10] - remove the space before them and full stops where applicable.Disambiguate Ute.Could wikilink "independence" to United States Declaration of Independence for context.Don't use single-sentence paragraphs, such as "The area was established as a U.S. National Monument on March 2, 1933 and made into a National Park on October 21, 1999. [8]" - flow intro prose, even if means making a single paragraph. The same applies to the Biology section.Numbers less than 10, write them out (so four instead of 4)."Many of the climbs are difficult and should only be done by advanced climbers. The canyon is an area known for its seriousness and traditional climbing values." - "...should only be done..."? Not pleasant reading. "...an area known for its seriousness..." - strange sounding place! So no-one has fun? I think I know what's trying to be said, so I think a reword in order."traditional climbing values.[11]"Rafting opportunities also exist in the canyon. In the national park itself, several impassable stretches of water block navigation, making rafting nearly impossible. However, rafting is available in the National Conservation Area located west next to the park.[12]" - too many short sentences and almost a bit advert-like.Last reference is an external link since it's not referenced within the article like the others...Trim the external links - an article of this length doesn't need five and if anything's that relevant then add it to the article and cite.
So, the article's on hold for now, attend to these issues and let me know when you're ready for me to come back and re-review. All the best... The Rambling Man 16:34, 30 July 2007 (UTC)
- Okay, I've made several minor changes and now consider it to be a good article. The Rambling Man 09:39, 2 August 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Park area
What is the area of the park? In the text it is stated as "47 mi² (122 km²) in size", while in the infobox it is "Area: 32,950 acres (133 km²)". Neither is footnoted. Which one is correct? Qblik talk 18:42, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
