User talk:Mickyounger/NetBox Blue

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[edit] First comments

1) This still reads like an advertisement or brochure. Purge it of marketing phrasing like "a simple, holistic solution for many common business problems," "achieved Premier level business partnership alliance with IBM" and "is said to be unique ", as well as the use of the word "solution" anywhere in the article. 2) Only one external link to the subject's own website(s) 3) You need to create real footnotes, not just dump a bunch of stuff at the bottom of the page. See WP:CITE for guidance on how to create footnotes for citations. 3a) A reproduction of a press release is never a reliable source, nor is it evidence of notability. 4) The draft language is in the sandbox, User:Mickyounger/NetBox Blue; it's a waste of space to reproduce it on your talk page. --Orange Mike | Talk 13:56, 6 May 2008 (UTC)