Talk:Durham railway station

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[edit] Cleanup

I've marked this page for clean up of the writing style. It's appalling! Some examples of poor primary school level English:

• "A new Entrance has been opened in The middle of the station. In the Victorian stone building....Also the old red Clocks are gone. They have been replaced by newer, modern types."

• "The Waiting room is adjecent to the coffee shop. In the middle taking pride of place is a model of Durham railway station from years ago. Heralding the station's past. The station was known to be dirty and grimy but now it has been revamped to a clean and modern standard."

Sentence structure?

• "Many travellers use this station and sometimes it can become crowded. Of course the station is quite well hidden you must as above turn off to your left almost as soon as you as you are under the viaduct and go up a steep hill."

Is it obvious to someone who has not been to Durham to know that you must as above turn off to your left and go up a hill?

• "Before the refurbishment passengers had to stand on the platform waiting for their train to arrive."

What about now? Do they stand on the tracks?

–MDCollins (talk) 11:29, 9 July 2007 (UTC)

MDCollins, I agree with you - the writing style reminds me of someone having a conversation with you over a mobile phone while they are jogging up a long and tiring hill. I would attempt to clean this up myself, but without knowing what is accurate, what isn't and from where any of it could be referenced it seems a bit pointless. Is there any way we could find out whether there are users in Durham who might be able to contribute here?ColourSarge 15:08, 13 July 2007 (UTC)

Yes, just discovered this page as it uses my photo, and it has a distinct ESL air about it. Besides the near-nonsensical style, parts of it are plain wrong: "Of course the station is quite well hidden you must as above turn off to your left almost as soon as you as you are under the viaduct and go up a steep hill." - well, no, you have to turn right almost as soon as you are under the viaduct and go up a steep hill. Stevekeiretsu (talk) 03:34, 16 December 2007 (UTC)

I have been working on a cleanup, along with 2 unregistered users. The fourth phase has just been completed. Anywikiuser (talk) 16:44, 22 January 2008 (UTC)