Talk:World Series of Poker bracelet

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Good article World Series of Poker bracelet has been listed as one of the Everyday life good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can delist it, or ask for a reassessment.
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[edit] GA review comments

I've reviewed this article against the GA criteria, and have the following comments:

  • "At first the bracelet was not highly regarded. Over time the term bracelet became synonymous with winning a championship event and the number of events a person has won is counted in bracelets. This is true even if the event was won prior to 1976 when the first bracelets were presented." this needs an overhaul, it's pretty ugly English and has tense and grammar issues.fixed
  • "...bracelet's..." - no apostrophe required. fixed
  • "...didn't even pick up two of them." - this needs rephrasing, and avoid the use of "didn't" - this should be more encyclopaedic, i.e. use "did not". Problematic throughout the article. fixed
  • "Professional tournament pokers believe that there are two types of poker players those who have won a bracelet and those who have not." - first, I assume it is supposed to read "..poker players.." and not simply "..pokers.." but more significantly, unless this is cited, it is decidedly original research. fixed
  • "The one he won..." is awkward. fixed
  • What was the "corny prize"? unknown, no sources that I could find describe or discuss it.
  • "The following year,..." sentence is followed by another "The following year, ..." sentence. Reads poorly. fixed
  • Turn the list in the "Bracelet description" section into prose.fixed
  • "excusive"? Spell check required. fixed
  • "...it is considered to be valuable..." some understatement! It needs quantifying really.fixed
  • "Typical Corum watches sell in the 10's of thousands." - so? I expect Casio, Timex, TAG Heuer could claim this. And citation? changed, but no casio/timex/sell for 50-200 dollars a piece... Corum is a high end manufacturer that caters to millionaires! But I changed this.
  • Numbers below ten ought to be written in English, i.e. five, not 5.fixed
  • "...that he gave his daughter one..." - could be mis-interpreted and isn't nice English anyway.fixed

There are too many issues here to even keep the article GA nomination on hold at this time, so I'm failing it. Feel free to attend to some or all of the above and re-nominate for GA at a later time. The Rambling Man 15:48, 13 July 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Becky

"...according to Becky Benion..." I've changed to Becky Behnen. If someone thinks it should be Becky Binion, fine. Benion is no good. Thegov2k2 03:26, 18 July 2007 (UTC)

I double checked this... and you are correct.Balloonman 03:55, 18 July 2007 (UTC)

I know it would not be NPOV to describe it as really tacky, but it is very hard to resist!! --ukexpat 15:22, 18 July 2007 (UTC)

Describe what as really tacky?Balloonman 15:50, 18 July 2007 (UTC)

[edit] GA review

GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    a (fair representation): b (all significant views):
  5. It is stable.
  6. It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
    a (tagged and captioned): b (lack of images does not in itself exclude GA): c (non-free images have fair use rationales):
  7. Overall:
    a Pass/Fail:


  • As opposed to the current title sentence, I think it would be more encyclopedic to use "The World Series of Poker (WSOP) bracelet is the most coveted prize in gaming." <- Reference to current ref 6. Done
  • "At first, the bracelets did not have much prestige." - Why? This lacks context. There needs to be some explanation of what the bracelets were like before. I recommend switching the Prestige and Bracelet description sections to remedy this. Done
  • "The bracelet in 1976 cost approximately $500 and was manufactured by Las Vegas jeweler Mordechai Yerushalmi, the exclusive manufacturer of WSOP bracelets until Harrah's Entertainment bought the rights to the WSOP in 2004." - How do you know this? Reworded and fixed.
  • Rather than quote the references, reword the information. Reserve quotations for actual quotes.Done
  • References need to be consistently formatted and include all information available. See WP:CITE for further details. I have formatted some of them. Basically, Author. "[url Title]". Date. Work. Retrieved on date. Done if it doesn't have a piece of info, it's because the data wasn't there.
  • Ref 9 is currently 4 references combined into one. This needs to be separated to be individual references. Done
  • Ref 10 doesn't seem to be working. Removed looks like a dead link.

The article is on hold while these changes are made. Regards, Lara♥Love 21:59, 25 July 2007 (UTC)

2 days left on the hold. If issues remain unaddressed, the nomination will be failed. Lara♥Love 18:07, 30 July 2007 (UTC)
I'll work on it this evening... my keyboard crashed on me over the weekend and it curtailed my editing---particularly on Sunday....Balloonman 18:37, 30 July 2007 (UTC)
FinishedBalloonman 04:06, 31 July 2007 (UTC)

The article has been listed as a Good Article. Thank you for your hard work. In improving this article, you have improved Wikipedia. Regards, Lara♥Love 05:18, 1 August 2007 (UTC)