Wikipedia:WikiProject Chess/Review/Alexander Alekhine

Currently assessed as A-Class by User:Ioannes Pragensis. Any objections? youngvalter 01:24, 3 August 2007 (UTC)

Object per peerreviewer (especially the Lead and Trivia section and own comments below). The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question. You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas.

• Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at Wikipedia:Lead. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.^[?]
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• Generally, trivia sections are looked down upon; please either remove the trivia section or incorporate any important facts into the rest of the article.^[?]
• There are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view.
  • allege
  • might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please strike this comment).^[?]
• Please make the spelling of English words consistent with either American or British spelling, depending upon the subject of the article. Examples include: honor (A) (British: honour), favourite (B) (American: favorite), defence (B) (American: defense), organize (A) (British: organise), organise (B) (American: organize), traveled (A) (British: travelled).
• Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
  • Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
• The script has spotted the following contractions: don't, if these are outside of quotations, they should be expanded.
• As done in WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space in between. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]^[?]
• I also think that the General references section could be expanded. Currently there is listed 1 biography and 3 general reference works. It would be nice to list a few biographies.
• Needs more in text references (using footnotes). Voorlandt 07:41, 4 August 2007 (UTC)

Object for most of Voorlandt's reasons, and some other minor points below. This is already a great article with a lot of useful content, but it is not A-class status (which is near-perfection in my view).

• it is a pity that the "Early life" section does not indicate when Alekhine first learned chess.
• more generally, the details on his family are too scarce. I would appreciate dates of birth/death of his father/mother, the age of his mother when she gave him birth, the age difference between him and his brothers/sisters (I find it relevant because they have taught him to play).
• most sections are too compact. For example the "Early chess career" is roughly a list for the moment, so maybe we could organise it as a list ?
• maybe we should point out that the "Grandmaster of chess" title from the tsar was the first time this distinction was used ?
• there are sometimes some opinions, like "On December 15, 1935 Max Euwe fortunately had won". Why is it fortunate ? "narrowly" would sound more neutral to me.
• some citations are needed for assessments like "The loss is largely attributed to Alekhine's alcoholism".
• the "Contributions" section may be expanded.
• all quotations should be referenced.
• the "References" section does not seem to be sorted SyG 13:12, 15 August 2007 (UTC)

Close this review As noone has garnered here for one week to add something, this review is finished and the article has failed its test for A-class (2 negative opinions, 0 positive opinions). As it is still a very good article, I will change it to GA-class. SyG 10:24, 22 August 2007 (UTC)