User talk:Rick brade

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Hello there!

Congratulations on your first article. It's pretty good for a first attempt!

I've removed the 'comment' parts, because remember wikipedia is always live - so comments in the text are a no-no. Please put comments in the discussion page, not the article.

I'll take a further look at the article, and make more comments later.

For now, though;


Welcome...

Hello, Rick brade, and welcome to Wikipedia! Thank you for your contributions. I hope you like the place and decide to stay. Here are some pages that you might find helpful:

Please sign your name on talk pages using four tildes (~~~~); this will automatically produce your username and the date. If you need help, check out Wikipedia:Questions, ask me on my talk page, or place {{helpme}} on your talk page and ask your question there. Again, welcome!  Chzz  ►  10:48, 1 June 2008 (UTC)

[edit] Further edits

Hi,

Normally, I wouldn't explain all the little edits I've done, but it sounded like you'd want to know, so;

I've changed "Related" to "See also";

Changed External links and See also to sections, rather than the bold heading you used, y using ==heading==

Removed some <br> - you hardly ever need to use them in WP, just put a blank line in

Reversed the order of 'External links' and 'See also' - it's a convention to have 'external' last

Added a 'references' section, ready to display the refs that need adding


Also, note that it's often a good idea to create the article in a Sandbox first, so you can play around with editing before it goes 'live'.

If you do have any questions, just ask.

Cheers, --  Chzz  ►  10:59, 1 June 2008 (UTC)

In other tinkering, I removed " that will be necessary to preserve the strength of the American economy for posterity" because it's not very WP:NPOV. I think you might run into problems if you're not careful about NPOV, so please have a good read of that - and also WP:COI.

--  Chzz  ►  11:08, 1 June 2008 (UTC)

I suggest you change "almost two dozen cities" to the actual number, if you know it or can find out. "almost two dozen cities" sounds a bit promotional. "23 cities" sounds nice and factual - thus encyclopaedic.