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I wrote out History and Terms, and will try to make a section "How to make a Renga" by taking previously written parts apart. Revth 16:13, 15 Jul 2004 (UTC)

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This article is mostly about Japanese renga. Should there also be mention added about the English-language six verse derivative of the renga called the rengay, created by Garry Gay? see:

http://www.baymoon.com/~ariadne/form/rengay.htm

gK 9 October 2004

No, gK. Despite its name, Mr. Gay's rengay cannot be described as a derivative of the renga. The sine qua non of renga is shift from the uchikoshi, while the rengay, by contrast, is themed.Yumegusa (talk) 22:44, 15 April 2008 (UTC)

[edit] number of errs

This artical is getting better but it still contains many errs.

1. "A Renga consists of at least three ku"-- many eraly renga are tsukeku, or 2 ku renga.
2. "the opening stanza of the Renga chain (the hokku), later became the basis for the modern Haiku style of poetry." Very missleading
3. "As the Renga was a popular poetry form," WHEN???
4. "The most favored form of Renga is Kasen" This is only true in the Edo period.
5. "Kasen means Great Waka Composers." True but this need to mention the import of the number 36.
6. "The earliest recorded Renga appeared in the late of Heian period." Yoshitomo cites the songs of Izanami and Izanagi from the Kojiki.
7. "Two of the most famous masters of Renga were the Buddhist Priest Sogi (1421 - 1502) and Matsuo Basho (1644 - 1694)." neither man was truly a Buddhist Priest

—The preceding unsigned comment was added by 128.59.26.165 (talk • contribs) 04:16, 11 March 2006 (UTC).

I've reworked the article primarily to clean up the rather untidy writing, but I'm no renga expert. I've done what I can to incorporate your points, as follows:

1. Changed, now reads "two ku"
2. Not really sure how this is misleading, and actually the article text appears to be correct given what I've read -- the first renga stanza, i.e. the 5-7-5 hokku, is what has become the modern haiku. If you can add or edit the text to read more clearly based on your own understanding, then be bold and do so.
3. Judging from the long span of dates simply between the lives of Sogi and Bashō, I don't think we can easily say precisely when renga were popular, so I fudged and simply added "for many centuries".
4. Kasen now noted as popular during the Edo period.
5. The bit about kasen also meaning "the great poetic sages" struck me as largely irrelevant, so I deleted it. If you think it's important enough to merit inclusion, please go ahead and add it.
6. I added bit about Izanami / Izanagi song, but who's Yoshitomo here? And can you add a citation?
7. The text reads to me as only indicating that Sogi was a priest, but not Bashō. Given that the Wikipedia article on Sogi does actually say he was a priest, I left the article text here as-is.

If I've goofed anywhere, by all means edit as you see fit. Cheers, Eiríkr Útlendi | Tala við mig 17:50, 17 May 2006 (UTC)

This article is really very 'organic' - i.e. all over the place. One day when I have time I'll start from scratch. But for the moment, some errors/proposals:

1. "As the renga was a popular poetry form..." This para is at best peripheral, and probably entirely irrelevant. Certainly out of place in its current position. Should be moved to end, or better, deleted.
2. (History) "The number of stanzas was reduced to 36". No, the 36-verse Kasen became the most popular form of renga. The Hyakuin continued to be written up into the Meiji period.
3. (History) "Masaoka Shiki claimed that" -> "Masaoka Shiki, although himself a participant in several renga, claimed that"
4. (History) "particularly in the UK" -> "including in the UK". Live renga are also growing in popularity in other countries such as USA, Ireland, etc.
5. (How to write a renga) "Three to four is the minimum number for a renga". No; solo renga have been and continue to be written. Three or four (or more) participants is usually considered better.
6. (Renga terms) "waki (脇)" -> "waki (脇)/wakiku (脇句)". The two terms are synonymous.

Yumegusa 22:12, 6 October 2007 (UTC)

Most of the above done. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Yumegusa (talk • contribs) 13:38, 19 October 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Clean-up

Looks like we might need an expert on Japanese poetry now to make sure this is on the level. I've done all I can for copy-editing. See the above and the article source for further details on items I'm aware of that need help. Cheers, Eiríkr Útlendi | Tala við mig 17:56, 17 May 2006 (UTC)