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[edit] Steel Claw

I have created a page on British comic book hero Steel Claw and another page on the 1961 movie The Steel Claw (to avoid confusion). Plase send me your comments. --Cyril Thomas 08:57, 7 September 2005 (UTC)

I'm afraid there are several problems with this piece. For a start, the lead section is far too short - it should be a decent summary of what the article is all about. Also, many of the individual sections of the piece are also far too short to justify their inclusion - the sections on Steel Claw around the world, for example, should probably be merged into one piece of text rather than under the several little headings they are now. I'm also very unsure about the inclusion of the 'gallery' at the bottom - as I understand it, the fair use provision justifies using images if they're important illustration to accompany an article, which the earlier pictures in the text probably are but the gallery isn't, so ought to be removed. And the complete lack of references doesn't help much, either. I'm sorry if I sound overly harsh - what you've got here is a decent start at an article, but it's got a long way to go yet, I'm afraid. Angmering 11:56, 16 September 2005 (UTC)

This superhero makes an appearance as an Easter egg in a game called One Must Fall: 2097 by EpiK Megagames. Serapion 8:20, 20 September 2005 (PST)

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• To Angmering - Thanks for the review and I agree with you. The gallery images are scanned and the tags are right. I should rewrite the intro though and I am working on it after I update I will send you the link. Thanks
• To Serapion - Thanks, that would make another item for trivia.

--Cyril Thomas 14:55, 23 September 2005 (UTC)