Talk:Palestinian Declaration of Independence

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[edit] Wikification

I rephrased the second paragraph as follows:

  • Explicitly indicated that the declaration does not recognize the State of Israel. This is a very important issue that should be stated clearly in the aticle.
  • Removed weasel words that were used: "generally interpreted", "at least a major step", "implicitly and perhaps ambiguously", "somewhat mentioned".

The article now presents the facts in a clear and NPOV way.
-- Gabi S. (talk) 09:24, 29 November 2007 (UTC)

Uhm, not quite NPOV. Your reduced the article to a statement that the declaration does not recognize the State of Israel. This article is somehow no longer about the declaration itself. You nuked the important information
“ While the declaration concerns Palestine, as defined by the British Mandate of Palestine, (which includes the whole of Israel),... ”
as well as
“ Just as in Israel's declaration of establishment, it partly bases its claims on UN GA 181. ”
You somehow also dropped the "See also" links. Please re-instate this lost information or I will continue to revert to the old version.
Cheers and thanks, pedro gonnet - talk - 29.11.2007 10:09
I will put these details back. However, the "see also" section is redundant. The State of Palestine and Proposals for a Palestinian state articles are the same one, and already referenced in the article itself. According to Wikipedia guidelines you should include in the "see also" section only related issues that were not mentioned already. And the Declaration of independence refers to declarations that actually led to independence, which is not the case here. -- Gabi S. (talk) 10:37, 29 November 2007 (UTC)
Granted in the first case. However, for the link Declaration of independence, I disagree. A declaration of independence is a declaration of independence, irrespective of its actual implementation. It's just what the name says: a declaration. Furthermore, Palestinian independence is an ongoing process and the non-existence of the state is not yet definitive. Cheers, pedro gonnet - talk - 29.11.2007 10:45
Ok. -- Gabi S. (talk) 10:52, 29 November 2007 (UTC)