Talk:Master of the Game

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Master of the Game was a good article nominee, but did not meet the good article criteria at the time. There are suggestions below for improving the article. Once these are addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake. Reviewed version: June 9, 2007

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Assessment comments The following comments were left by the assessors: (edit · refresh) I feel that the author of the article has failed to introduce the characters in a straightforward manner. The first line makes you wonder, "Who's Kate?" Nitin 09:54, 3 January 2007 (UTC)

[edit] GA fail

Fails on

• (1a) Needs copyediting.
• (1b) The last three sections are bulleted lists, not prose.
• (1b) I'm not sure what purpose the "Historical references" section serves. Any of this information that is important should be mentioning when discussing the relevant plot or themes of the novel.
• (2b) "Background" section makes no sense - "background" to what? What kind of "background"? I thought it was going to be background to the writing of the novel itself. There are no details here whatsoever. Moreover, we cannot take Sheldon's word on this issue. We need independent verification.
• (3a) There are no sections on the "Themes" of the novel or the writing style used in the novel.
• (3a) Try turning the "Awards and nominations" section into a "Reception" section and describe what critics said in paragraph form.
• (3b) This page is almost entirely plot summary. The summary needs to be severely cut down. See WP:NOT#INFO. Awadewit | talk 20:28, 9 June 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Readability

I found this article rather difficult to get through, so I took a stab at cleaning it up some; unfortunately I am not familiar with the subject material, so I didn't want to start rearranging the whole article. It is, however, still in need of something. I would suggest that the order of information be rearranged (plot before publication, etc.) and that some of the redundant information, linkage, and prose be done away with. Gizzakk 17:26, 20 July 2007 (UTC)