Talk:Hurricane Jimena (2003)

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A nice start. Needs a full copyedit to fix the spelling and grammar errors. Overall prose is weak and awkward in places. Is there any more storm history? Since the storm is fairly recent, I would think the SH could be expanded quite a bit. Also, there are some MoS breaches. For example, in the sentence, High wind gusts of 53-58 mph (85-93 km/h)..., 53-58 should be an en dash instead of a hyphen. Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 13:21, 4 June 2008 (UTC)

I'll chime in. UTC times should be a four digit number (0600), not (600). Capitalization and spacing errors should be fixed. The units need fixing in regards to rounding; if the first unit is rounded to ending in a 5 or 0, the other unit should also be rounded. This sentence makes no sense - Operationally, there was uncertainty if that area of disturbed weather was related to an earlier tropical wave that crossed Central America as that system was poorly tracked. Why does that even matter if operationally its origins were uncertain? Surely its origins were better assessed in post-analysis. 105 miles south of Hawaii needs metric unit. I'm really confused at the last two sentences of the SH. The second to last sentence says at 1727 UTC, the low level had nearly dissipated, and then, 33 minutes later, At 1800 UTC, the Joint Typhoon Warning Center issued their final advisory on Jimena as the storm dissipated 715 miles (1151 km) southeast of Wake Island. What is up with that? Like JC said, it's a good start, content wise (the SH is probably a good enough length). With some work it could reach GA status, but not quite yet. ♬♩ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:04, 4 June 2008 (UTC)
I made some changes a while back, is it ready now for B Class?. Storm05 (talk) 12:25, 9 June 2008 (UTC)
Sorry, but not yet. I'll give you some examples of things to fix.
  • Jimena formed on August 28 in far Eastern Pacific Ocean as a tropical depression and moved westward where it rapidly became a hurricane the following day. Seems to be missing the word "the" in between "far Eastern".
  • Jiemna bushed past the Hawaii before becoming a tropical depression on September 3. Notice the typo?
  • Moving westward over waters grater than 82°F (28°C)[3], "Grater"?
  • On August 29, satellite imagery showed a well defined eye developing in the storm as the storm winds increased to 60 mph (97 km/h). Is poorly worded.
  • Rainfall of 6–10 inches were reported across the Big Island. "Rainfall were reported"?
  • Damage from Hurricane Jimena was minimal as high winds from the storm knocked down trees and damaged power lines leaving 1,300 residents without electricity. Huh? The sentence says damage was minimal, but it goes on to talk about damage it caused!!
Overall it still needs some work. It has some good content, but there are numerous spelling, grammar and wording issues. Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 12:36, 9 June 2008 (UTC)
Done. Storm05 (talk) 12:43, 9 June 2008 (UTC)
There's still a typo in the lead. Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 13:10, 9 June 2008 (UTC)
I dont see any. Storm05 (talk) 17:45, 9 June 2008 (UTC)
It would be better for you to read the article word by word, but here it is: Jiemna brushed past the Hawaii before becoming a tropical depression on September 3. Also, "The Hawaii"? Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 19:05, 9 June 2008 (UTC)
Fixed. Storm05 (talk) 11:43, 10 June 2008 (UTC)