Talk:Heather Small

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The article may be improved by following the WikiProject Biography 11 easy steps to producing at least a B article. -- Edofedinburgh 02:59, 21 March 2007 (UTC)

[edit] second album

Quote: Heather recorded her new album on the 1 March 2006 Did she really record the album on a single day? I might express my doubts she did. 62.178.193.144 21:28, 16 December 2006 (UTC)

[edit] Beginning

Quoting the article: Small was born and raised in West London and joined her first group, Hot House, while she was still a teenager. However, after a chance meeting with a Manchester DJ called Mike Pickering, formerly of Quando Quango, her distinctive voice, similar to Vic Reeve's pub style, helped sell over 10 million albums worldwide singing with his group M People. They had considerable success with songs such as Moving on Up and Search for The Hero.

Problems with this section include the use of several run on sentences, which degrade the article. The 2nd sentence is definitely a run on with several subordinate clauses.

Suggested re-write:

Small was born and raised in West London. As a teenager, she sang with Hot House. She joined Manchester DJ Mike Pickering's M People after a chance meeting with him (when?). Her distinct voice is credited (by whom?) with helping sell over 10 million albums worldwide. The songs Moving On Up and Search for a Hero reached #X and #Y on Z charts. (This helps eliminate some of the weasel words within the article.)

If there are no objections to the re-write, I'll research and make the changes in this section. Not to disparage Ms. Small's success as an artist, the article appears conjectural rather than factual. Barclay316 (talk) 19:37, 8 January 2008 (UTC)

I agree with the re-write, if only to remove the curious assertion that her singing voice is similar to Vic Reeve's pub style! Informed Owl (talk) 00:43, 12 January 2008 (UTC)Informed Owl
  • Have now tackled this, & several other issues. It may not be perfect, but I hope it's better. --Rodhullandemu (Talk) 13:43, 21 February 2008 (UTC)