Talk:Gan Eng Seng
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[edit] Note on addition of known descendants of Gan Eng Seng
As per Wikipedia policy on Verifiability, all statements and facts must be backed up by adequate citations and references. Without exception, this rule is applicable should anyone include new addition of known descendants of Gan Eng Seng on the article itself. If its sources are not cited, such entries will be duly removed to protect the integrity of the article. -- Aldwinteo 15:28, 20 August 2007 (UTC)
[edit] GAN on hold
- Please move free images to Commons
- Sorry, I'm not familiar with the necessary procedures for Commons but would let the responsible admins or bots to evaluate & transfer my pix accordingly as they did so previously. -- Aldwinteo (talk) 05:28, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
- "Some of his most recognised contributions known to date" - known to date isn't needed since he's dead, thus not likely to make any more
- "Fujian Province in China" --> "Fujian, China"
- "education which he learnt" - needs an "in" before the "which"
- "He came to Singapore after his father's death when he was sixteen" - sounds like his father was 16 at time of death...use some commas and stuff to clarify
- "Gan was diligent and capable, and his ability won him the recognition and keen interest of Thomas Scott" - is this sourced by ref 2?
- Yes, it refers from the start of the para until the mentioned quote above. -- Aldwinteo (talk) 05:28, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
- "Singapore as a port owes much to his genius and foresight" - same thing. Just POV issues otherwise
- "which help Gan to make most of his fortunes" - change "help" to past tense. Not sure what "fortunes" refers to...
- "was considered auspicious then" - put "then" before "considered"
- "His first son he adopted": change to "The first son he adopted" or "His first adopted son"
- Is it possible in the wives table to say which wife produced which child, etc.?
- "it was renamed as" - change "as" to "to"
- "Under their good management" - a bit too much POV for my liking...
- "As of 2007, it's currently" - rmv "currently" (redundant) and change it's to it is
- "it has moved eight times, the most ever known in Singapore schools due to expansion needs during its 122-year history" - kinda choppy, not sure what it's trying to say here. It moved 8 times in 122 years, and that's a record?
- Yes, it's a record as per S'pore public schools to date as mentioned in The Straits Times previously. Text rephrased. -- Aldwinteo (talk) 05:28, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
- "where his forefathers were born" - but commas around both sides of this
- "An instance of this kind" --> "For instance" (perhaps?)
- "Gan strongly backed and financed it" - rmv "it"
- "till today, it still continues" - change "it" to "and", rmv "still"
- "According to the annual report of Tan Tock Seng Hospital for 1892 made mentioned " -
rmv "according to"
- "to this very day" - very isn't needed
- "In 1895, Gan was one of the co-founders in setting up" - replace "in setting up" with "of" so it reads better
- "is known to play" --> "plays"
- "worth an estimated of S$550,000." - rmv "of"
- "Due to redevelopment of the area later," - rmv "later", or put it after "to"
And that's the lot. Leave a note on my talk page when this is done please. Cheers, dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 10:08, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
- Thank you for your time & the suggested copyedits as per the context of native speaker of English. Please review the revision made & feel free to make any amendments where necessary. -- Aldwinteo (talk) 05:28, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
- All looks good here - no unresolved issues. I might move the images to Commons myself if I get the chance. dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 07:25, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
This GAN has passed, and this is now a good article! If you found this review helpful, please consider helping out a fellow editor by reviewing another good article nomination. Help and advice on how to do so is available at Wikipedia:Reviewing good articles, and you can ask for the help of a GAN mentor, if you wish.
Cheers, dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 07:25, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
- Thank u for passing this article to GA class mate. As for your friendly suggestion of me helping out as a GA reviewer, I'm sorry that I've to turn down your request as I'm more passionate in researching & writing history/heritage articles for Wikipedia instead. Moreover, I hate judging & be involved in any lengthy discussions or heated disputes during such reviews if opinion differs (Look at GAR or FAN to get what I mean). Fyi, u are the 3rd person to bring up on this subject to date. Best rgds -- Aldwinteo (talk) 09:49, 14 April 2008 (UTC)

