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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article review. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 20:59, 20 March 2007.

[edit] Arbroath

I and a few other editors have spent a good few hours trying to improve this article, in line with Dundee and I'm just wondering if it's there yet or if there's anything need a little more work. -- Nick t 01:08, 14 March 2007 (UTC)

  • Comments I think this may need a copyedit to clean up the prose. I changed several typos or small things I noticed in my glance through. Here's some minor comments on the lede prose:
    • "Its history begins, like nearby Dundee, with the Picts in the Iron Age, and remained a small village..." It's history remained a small village?
    • "Abbey" why capitalised if we're using an indefinite article. And I'd link it right away, not in the third paragraph. In some parts of the article it's not capitlised even with the definite article - I'd decide and stick with it.
    • "eventually disrepair" either the first word's supposed to be an adjective or the second a verb. . .
    • "rumoured to have been used in the manufacture of bullets" needs a cite.
    • There seems to be a lot of references to "just like Dundee". By the first line of the History section, it's already been said 3 times. MarkBuckles (talk) 09:18, 14 March 2007 (UTC)
  • Comment I don't think it's there yet - the prose needs a lot of work (some parts are rather wordy) and some areas of elaboration are needed. I had a go at Demographics and Geography, the original version of the latter was in large part a long list of distances to other towns. Orderinchaos78 03:01, 17 March 2007 (UTC)
The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article review. No further edits should be made to this page.