Talk:E. G. Coffman

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The following sentence sounds a bit chunky.

"He firstly described the four conditions necessary for a deadlock to exist in 1971."

I would recommend this is changed to:

In 1971, he was the first to describe the four conditions necessary for a deadlock to exist.


Thoughts?