Talk:Baths of Trajan
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The amount of detail here seems sufficient, however I find the wording to be rather confusing. Maybe if you could work on rewording some of the sentences to make them shorter, the article would read better as a whole. The details given about the information you chose to supply is good, but I still wonder, what type of people used the baths? how long were the baths an important part of the city? -Alice Magill
Though you provide a sufficient level of information on the architecture and history of the baths, I find myself re-reading a lot of the sentences to absorb it entirely. A good way to alleviate this is by adding headings and subheadings to make it more organized and seem more clear. The history of the Oppian Hill could be used as a heading (beginning with Nero) for example. Also, some of the information is repetitive, such as mentioning that it was built over Nero's palace twice. Information is plentiful, and good use of an architectural picture as well as the external links. -Kevin Carey
lots of good information, but i agree with Kevin, it is a bit repetitive in parts, namely the 'baths being located in the Oppian Hills' and 'Trajan placing a platform on the old palace', both of which are mentioned at least twice. i do, however, think the 1st and 4th paragraphs are great, concise and informative. the 2nd & 3rd can be easily combined into one big paragraph about how the baths came to be. -- Mark Nilsson
